My first novella, verdus 13

Gapey said:
If that’s the case then it could just be a pdf doebeit
Anyways I’m archiving it right now so I can read it without goygle datamining
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converting it is extra steps OP probably didn’t think about. Also you can just use a browser/extension that blocks the ‘mining albeit.
 
oxamrazor said:
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verdus

Chapter 1 Expungement It was 20:30 PM in Salem, Massachusetts,a pretty quiet town right now. He had finished working and was already home then doing his laundry, eating, then after that cleaning the plate, brushing his teeth, setting his bed and then going to sleep. All of these are all done af...
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any updates?
 

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You still need to work on run on sentences and grammar. It's clearly better and I can follow whats going on now, but the way it's written is still unpleasant. It doesn't matter if the story itself is gold if the writing is painful to read. I'm not trying to shit on you, if I didn't give a shit, I'd just never read it. Many books require dozens of drafts. Again, I suggest getting some text to speech type program and have it read your story to back to you. If the wording sounds strange, fix it.
 
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